Dream Deep

Er... Alanna. This strikes me rather as better material for a blog entry, not exactly poetry. Fine message, I suppose, but this really is not poetry.

Oy... thank you all - Jacquie, Trident, Imp, Snoink - for the comments and critiques. At the moment I seem to be working on Draft #3 of the Chair (yes, ...

As much as I respect and value your opinions, both as a writer and an great friend, are you sure about that? I don't particularly care for my style myself ...

Ah yes, the prologue is already significantly cut down and rewritten, I merely haven't changed it here. The second person, too, is demolished -- as are a good deal of ...

Nice thought, Cal, but quite confusing. Either that or I truly am not meant to be a poet, but I was rather lost throughout... ;)

Beautiful, Crysi. ^_~ And sweet. I wish I could write poetry on the spot half as well as you... and because it's for Jack it's extra special. ^_^

I read that a good while ago, I though it was a very sweet story. I like how the story made a full circle, how everything was resolved. ^_^ It ...

Thanks Rosethorn! That was quite helpful and I'm very glad you liked it. Oy, I've gotta post more before I lose my audience's attention. ^_~

Spacing, my friend, you really want spacing. Every dialogue needs to be a new paragraph. Fine story but very difficult to read as a solid block of text (as above). ...

Oy, I keep forgetting you're a mod, Imp, this sudden power on your part keeps taking me by surprise whenever you move things or edit them. ^_^

Heh, not quite, but nearly there. I'm getting rather far now, and I'm ashamed I'm not posting more of it here - but that's think about YWS, once people begin ...

Amusing, Chantel. It could probably do without the violet title, but all the same, it was quite droll. Good job, on this. ^_^

This was really nice, Wiggy! It read great, it was nicely worded and it flowed. But perhaps it ended just a little abruptly? I was sort of expecting more - ...

Snoink: But! But! I love ellipses! Yes... delete all of them. And why? Because frankly, my dear, they suck. Completely. *shoots Snoink* XD But in any event, Imp, you've got ...

Ooh, I'll have to read that... ^_^ I read the rest, too, Gyr and I really like it. Tannar's awesome, but he seems to be getting on Kareena's nerves, which ...